Changes to Narrative element of the storyboard:
- Replacing the shot of Nick against the wall throwing the photo (0.33) with either long shot of characters fighting behind counter or through car windscreen or over table
- Making the shot of Nick yelling down the phone a split screen, with Naomi yelling down her phone as the other side
- Replacing the swinging phone cord with either Nick yelling in the car or the protagonists staring at eachother
- No protagonist's mouths miming lyrics - to be replaced with either Nick storming out of the car or Nome against wall (or both on a split screen - to be decided in editing)
- Swing shot to be changed to an extreame high angle (as this looked more professional)
- Replacing the shot of the backs of the protagonist's heads with either a bubble shot or a cloud watching shot
- No close up of Naomi's mouth miming lyrics, instead of this part of the screen - have either the bubble blowing or the cloudwatching
- Replacing the smashed vodka bottle with a tracking shot of the counter filled with alcohol
- Replacing the POV of characters miming lyrics to eachother with either Nick on his own on the same bench as the prior shot or another fighting shot (over table)
- Replacing the slide shot with bubbles or cloudwatching or flower
- Replacing splashing water over face with Nick looking out of window
- Replacing girl running into shot with a happy shot
- Then swapping Nick burning the photo with this happy shot (as it fits better with the ending this way)
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